The Man Who Will Be Thursday
I have been trying, for the past week, to write Barack Obama’s acceptance speech, without much success. And now we’re down to the wire.
Don’t worry, the Obama campaign isn’t waiting on me. It’s just something I do.
Four years ago, I wrote George Bush’s acceptance speech for the GOP convention. The President chose to give a different speech, and even though I think my speech was better, and even though he wound up winning with his approach, I still don’t really hold it against him.
I didn’t have a lot of interest in writing McCain’s speech because I think we all know what it will say. It would be an exercise in pure mimicry or it would have nothing to do with reality.
But Obama has proven very difficult for me. I’m still not entirely sure why, but here are a few reasons.
First of all, I just have less experience with his voice. When I wrote that speech for Bush, I had been listening to the President for four years. His actual speechwriters still had an advantage over me in terms of familiarity with the speaker, but not a huge one. Obama I have only heard speak occasionally, and never live. And reading speeches doesn’t accomplish the same goal as hearing them read.
Second, I’m a registered Republican, and I’ve been at least moderately marinated in GOP rhetoric for years. I know how GOP acceptance speeches go, what themes they’ll hit, and how they’ll hit them. I worry that, if I reach into my rhetorical pouch for some Democratic rhetoric, what I’ll pull out is more like a parody thereof.
Third, Obama’s not a typical Democratic nominee, because he’s positioned as a reform Democrat rather than a lunch bucket Democrat – “wine track” rather than “beer track” – and the only nominees I can think of who fit that mold (Jimmy Carter and Michael Dukakis) are not folks I’d want to be copying. Of course, every race is different, and I’m not by any means suggesting that Obama is doomed because he’s perceived as a reform Democrat. But it does make speechwriting harder. If I were writing a speech for Hillary Clinton, I think I’d have a better idea where to start. But Obama’s big speeches come basically in two modes: airy and soaring is one, and cerebral and analytical is the other. I thought his race speech was really quite impressive, but a speech like that would be a disaster as a nomination acceptance speech.
Fourth, Obama’s black. I’m not, and no Presidential nominee has ever been. I may be self-conscious about my writing for him because of that in ways that he himself would not be – or my may lack self-consciousness about some aspect of the way he needs to speak that he is very self-conscious of. Example: if I give Obama a bit of populist anger, do I run the risk that he comes off as an “angry black man” – and if I don’t, am I flinching from what he needs to do out of fears that he would come across like that, where he would know how to deliver such a speech without pushing those buttons? Who knows?
Fifth, and I think this is the most important I still, at this late date, have no idea why Obama is running. I mean, I know why: he wants to be President. He’s “got game” – you don’t need more reason. But Obama has done a rather astonishing thing: he’s built an entire movement – he’s built a fundraising and organizing machine comparable to a national political party, in fact – without really standing for anything in particular. He is not, as George McGovern was, running to take the Democratic Party decisively to the left, nor is he, as Ted Kennedy was, running to restore a certain kind of liberalism within the Democratic Party, nor is he, as Bill Clinton was, running to transform liberalism into some kind of new, Third Way synthesis. Apart from his position on Iraq, he in no way distinguished himself from his rivals as representing a particular faction or even a particular worldview within the Democratic Party or the tradition of American liberalism, and Iraq he has forcefully maintained was a matter of his personal good judgment rather than an indication that he thinks about foreign policy profoundly differently from the Washington consensus. Obama has been attacked from various quarters for running a personality-based campaign, all about his own innate wonderfulness and ability to magically bind up all our political wounds and so forth. And while it’s certainly true that Obama has his lunatic supporters who think he’s the messiah, I think the real reason he’s perceived this way is that, lacking an animating cause, the candidate himself perforce became the cause. And that’s a huge problem because, in the end, a majority of voters is simply not going to vote for Obama on the basis of his innate wonderfulness.
Obama, unfortunately for him, has built himself a bit of a box. He needs to do some contradictory things tomorrow night to get out of it. He needs to establish himself as “Mr. Democratic Party” because the Democratic Party is still divided, and also has much better party ID numbers than it has had in ages. But he needs to hold on to those who were originally attracted to him because he appeared to represent a reform agenda. He needs to make the case for himself as the right agent of change. But he needs to (with good humor) deflate some of the ludicrous messianism that has swirled about him during the campaign. He needs to sound angry on behalf of hard-working Americans without sounding like an angry person. Most important, he needs to re-frame the election as a choice between him and McCain rather than a referendum on Barack Obama, but without undermining his reputation as someone pursuing a “different kind of politics.” And he needs to do all these contradictory things while also providing an organizing theme for his candidacy that has been lacking to date.
I’m not sure the speech that follows does the job. You tell me.
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Thank-you, thank-you. I am humbled and sobered by my fellow Democrats for the honor you have extended me. And I accept your nomination.
We’ve got a lot of work to do, as a campaign, as a party, as a country, to get out of the hole that George Bush and John McCain have dug these past eight years. And I’m eager to get to work. But one thing I am very glad of is: I won’t have to work alone. And before I get into detail about the work that has to be done, I want to take a moment to thank some of the people who brought us this far.
I want to thank Mayor John Hickenlooper for giving the Democratic National Convention such a warm welcome in what a lot of folks might think is hostile territory here in “red state” Colorado. Of course, John’s a Democrat, so maybe Denver’s not so “red” as all that.
And I want to thank Governor Bill Ritter for his extraordinary hospitality as well. If course, he’s a Democrat, too. Come to think of it, so is Senator Ken Salazar of this fine state.
And the next Senator from the “red state” of Colorado? He’s a fellow by the name of Mark Udall, and you know what? He’s a Democrat, too.
So I want to thank the people of the great state of Colorado, not only for welcoming our party and our campaign and all the volunteers who put in so much hard work to make this convention the success it has been, but for giving America such a great group of dedicated public servants, and showing America that there really are no red states and blue states, but one United States, colored red, white and blue.
I want to thank Governor Mark Warner, the next Senator from the state of Virginia, for his keynote on Tuesday. You watch that guy. Bill Clinton gave the keynote address in 1988, and four years later he was President. I can’t seem to recall who gave the keynote four years ago. Anyhow, I have a feeling we’re going to be hearing a lot more from Mark Warner.
I want to thank President Bill Clinton for his speech on Wednesday. You’re going to hear a lot from the Republican Party and the McCain campaign about how you can’t take a chance on electing a Democrat, that we can’t go back to the days when we had a Democratic President. And, you know, I see their point. Inflation under 2%. Unemployment at record lows. Median real wages rising for the first time since the 1970s. The stock market at an all-time high. I mean, who’d want to live through that again?
And I want to thank my rivals for this year’s nomination. One of them is now my running mate, Joe Biden, a born fighter, and I thank him in particular for his passionate address on Wednesday. But honestly, if I filled my cabinet by drawing on the incredibly deep pool of talent our party displayed in this nomination fight, I’d have one of the strongest cabinets our country has seen. Actually, I’m not sure where I could put Bill Richardson; he’s held so many cabinet posts already, he may be overqualified at this point.
And I want to single out Hillary Clinton for special thanks, for her gracious and powerful speech on Tuesday, but more than that, for all she’s done, throughout this campaign and throughout her life, for our party and for America. Hillary Clinton has already changed America by her historic campaign, and I have no doubt whatsoever that her greatest days are ahead of her. For all that she has done and will yet do, I thank her, and my two daughters thank her.
And I want to thank all of you – I told you I’d come around to it – all of you, who have worked so hard and are still working so hard on this campaign, to bring change we can believe in.
My fellow Americans, every four years the Democratic and Republican candidates stand up and tell you this is a crucial election, and America cannot afford to make the wrong choice. John McCain’s going to say it next week. And I’m going to tell you the same thing today, because I believe it’s true.
But there’s a more important truth that I don’t want us to lose sight of. When we weigh our hopes and our fears about the future, we shouldn’t forget: we’re talking about America here.
We’re talking about a country that won two world wars and the Cold War. That survived the Civil War and the Great Depression. That split the atom, landed on the Moon, and unraveled the secret of the double helix. And that has remained a free Republic for two hundred and twenty-one years.
America’s even going to survive eight years of President George W. Bush – less than five months to go – through bungled wars and economic and natural disasters, because of the strength and character of the American people. And that’s the most important truth, more important than the results of any one election.
I’m a Christian, and so I see God’s miracles all around me, but I don’t believe any man can work miracles. And neither did the men who founded this great nation of ours. They did not set out to make heaven on earth. They set their sights on something more simple: a more perfect union. Not perfect: more perfect.
And in every generation, in every election, that is what the American people have sought: a more perfect union. More free. More prosperous. More true to the ideal upon which it was founded, that all men are created equal.
That’s what I want. That’s what I wanted when I was a young man in Chicago, trying to do my small part to help poor tenants and laid-off steelworkers get control of their lives and pull themselves back up into the middle class.
That’s what I wanted when I was an Illinois state senator, working to bring downstate farmers and upstate industrial workers together to make our state’s economy work for all its citizens, and to bring the police and the criminal justice system together to establish procedures to ensure convictions are fair, and that they stick.
That’s what I wanted when I opposed the war in Iraq before it started, a war I knew would pull this country apart right when it had come together, and that would set back the war on terror rather than winning it.
Our country is headed in the wrong direction. But it won’t take a miracle to turn this country around. We didn’t get into the mess we’re in because we were led by men who hated their country, nor because the American people are a nation of whiners as one of my opponent’s top advisors said.
We’re where we are because we’re going the wrong way, following the wrong people down the wrong road.
There’s an old story Ronald Reagan – a President my opponent admires greatly and whom I, you might be surprised to hear, have said a few good things about as well – an old story he used to tell about a fellow who brings his son to a psychiatrist, saying, my boy is an incurable optimist, and I’m worried about it. I want him to get a more realistic outlook on life.
So the psychiatrist tells the boy he’s going to give him a present. He brings the boy into a room to get his present, and presents him with an enormous pile of manure. But the boy doesn’t look disappointed. In fact, he jumps on the pile and starts digging like mad.
“What on earth are you doing, son?” the psychiatrist asks. “That’s a pile of manure!”
“I know!” the boy answers, “and it’s so big, I figure there’s bound to be a pony in there somewhere!”
It’s a good joke, isn’t it? I know I already mentioned I’ve said kind things in the past about President Reagan, but I don’t think I’ve ever given him due credit for being a good joke-teller.
But after eight years of George Bush, don’t you feel just a little too much like that boy on the pile?
We’ve been digging for eight years now, and we just seem to be getting deeper in something I won’t mention.
And there’s a candidate in this election who’s running on a platform of: keep digging.
Eight years ago, candidate George Bush accepted the Republican nomination, and he said about the Democrats: “They had their chance. They have not led. We will.”
Well, now they’ve had their chance. And we have certainly been led. But where have they led us?
They have led us into the worst domestic financial crisis in more than a generation. Today, house prices are dropping nationally by more than 15% year over year, the worst performance in the housing market since the Great Depression.
For most Americans, their one and only home is their most precious asset, the place where they tuck their kids in at night and also the repository of their savings. And now, millions of middle-class Americans are facing the nightmare of foreclosure. Whole neighborhoods are at risk of unraveling, one empty house standing lonely beside another, breeding crime and despair.
Democrats in the Congress proposed legislation to stem the tide of foreclosures, and preserve middle-class neighborhoods at risk. And what was John McCain’s response?
He said the government should limit its response to institutions that pose a “systemic risk” to the financial system.
Now, Senator McCain knows how to engage in straight talk when it suits him, so let me spell out what that means.
An investment bank like Bear Stearns, where bankers and traders made millions in bonuses by buying and selling mortgages without regard to risk? If they should fail, that would pose a systemic risk to the financial system.
A family of five living on $50,000 per year, about to lose their home because their mortgage payments have just gone way up? I’m sorry, they don’t pose a systemic risk. They’ll have to get by on their own.
Now, that might make sense if you think that investment bankers are what drive the American economy, and not the workers, consumers, and homeowners of the great American middle-class.
But it doesn’t make sense to any of the Americans I talked to on the campaign trail, in Iowa, in New Hampshire, in Nevada, in Wisconsin, in Virginia, in Ohio, in Colorado.
I’d like to ask my opponent: if we lose the great American middle class, and let the American dream slip away for the next generation, where will the savings come from to power that great financial system we’re all worried about?
But, more important, if those are our priorities, what will happen to government of the people, by the people, and for the people?
We live in a world of extraordinary economic and technological change. And that change is bringing great benefits, to America and to the world. The rise of China and India is pulling hundreds of millions of people out of desperate poverty, and it a more productive planet is good for America as well.
But not all of the consequences of these changes are benign. If we are to take advantage of the opportunities before us, we need to change as well. And our government plays a role.
Over the last eight years, the median American wage-earner has actually lost ground. People are working harder than ever, earning less than they were eight years ago, while the price of food and fuel and health care skyrockets.
This is not a simple problem, and there are a lot of different good ideas about how to address it.
We need to create a nation infrastructure fund, to address the enormous backlog of investment required to bring our transportation infrastructure up to date, and to provide millions of high-paying jobs.
We need to invest in retraining for employment in the industries of the future.
We need to enforce our labor laws, so that workers can organize to fight for their fair share of their productive labor.
We need to raise the minimum wage and the Earned Income Tax Credit, a proven strategy to keep hard-working Americans hanging on to the bottom rung of the ladder from slipping into poverty.
And we need to cut taxes where it counts: on small businesses and startup companies that are the engines of innovation, and on working families that are paying a higher and higher percentage of the total tax burden even as their real wages have gone down.
There’s no shortage of good ideas out there for how to help America’s working families, and make the American economy work for the American people again. We’ve been looking for those ideas all through the campaign. And it’s funny, you know: when you get up each morning trying to find solutions to problems, sometimes you find them.
So it is particularly impressive that John McCain has hit on a strategy for making it worse.
He plans to cut taxes on the wealthiest taxpayers, while raising taxes on the middle class.
Some of you out there probably think you didn’t hear me right, so let me say it again: John McCain’s plan raises taxes on the middle class.
He doesn’t advertise that, of course. Part of his tax plan is a modest income tax cut for lower-bracket taxpayers, so that’s the part he talks about. You’ve got to do a little digging to find the tax hikes. But they’re there.
Right now, most Americans get their health insurance through their employer. And if the employer contributes to their premiums, that contribution is not subject to tax.
John McCain would change that. He’d start taxing middle class families for the health insurance they get from their employer. The tax hike is big enough that, by one estimate, a typical couple earning $40,000 per year could pay more than $1000 more in taxes by the end of McCain’s first term.
Now, you ask my opponent why he’s doing this, he’ll say: to solve our health-care problem. He’s just leveling the playing field between people with insurance and people without. And he’s got a point: he’s just decided the way to do it is to bring those who do have health insurance down to the level of those who don’t rather than the other way around.
It’s amazing. And you know next week, you know what they are going to say. It’s our party they are going to accuse of waging class warfare.
We have got to solve the problem of health care in America. We are spending more per capita than any industrialized nation, and we’re not any healthier for it. For poorer and even middle-class Americans, we’re actually less healthy. And we’ve got nearly 38 million people who are uninsured.
Americans know they are getting a raw deal from the health care system as it exists. And they are ready for change. And it’s not just folks who are struggling without insurance who are ready. Go talk to any manufacturer and they’ll tell you, they are getting killed by the cost of health insurance.
Universal health care is a dream deferred for far too long, and there is only one party and one candidate in this election who is committed to making that dream a reality, and it is not John McCain.
Sometimes the choice really is that simple.
We have a fundamental choice in this election. It is a choice between a politics of division and a politics of addition. It is a choice between an America focused on seizing the opportunities of the future and an America obsessed with the quarrels of the past. It is a choice between a politics of fear, and a politics of hope.
That contrast is apparent in the way we have campaigned. It is apparent in issue after issue that the American people care about. But nowhere is the contrast more apparent than on the issue of energy and the environment. Nowhere is it so clear how thoroughly the last eight years have been squandered. And nowhere is it clearer that John McCain offers more of the same.
In the first year of his administration, John F. Kennedy declared: America will go to the Moon. “We do these things,” he said, “not because they are easy, but because they are hard.”
Eight years later, Neil Armstrong took one giant leap for mankind. America had met the challenge.
The preeminent national security challenge, economic challenge, and environmental challenge of our day is our dependence on imported oil. Oil is what connects the conflict in former-Soviet Georgia with the pinch at the pump in Pennsylvania with the failing fortunes of Detroit’s auto makers.
We import more than 60% of the oil we consume, and we import most of that from countries that are unstable or actively hostile. Every day, we are putting money into the pockets of regimes that do not wish us well.
And what has the Bush Administration done with its eight years? How have they met this challenge?
With war and threats of war that drive up the price of oil, and with tax breaks for oil companies already sitting on a gusher of profits.
And what does John McCain propose?
More of the same.
If we are to rise to this challenge, and secure American independence, it will take a full-spectrum response.
We need to invest in breakthrough clean energy technologies, and promote sustainable use of our domestic resources of oil, coal and natural gas.
We need bring on line new sources of electricity, and step up our efforts at conservation.
We need to crack down on speculation that increasingly dominates the commodities markets and provide tax incentives for energy efficiency.
And above all, we need to implement a market-oriented carbon-trading program that will harness the economic efficiency of our great system of private enterprise to drive down emissions 80% by 2050, and eliminate once and for all our dependence on foreign oil.
We used to be a leader on these issues. Now, we are not even a follower. We are simply out of the game.
And the Republican Party of George Bush and John McCain? They seem to be proud of that fact. They actively mock people for trying to address this vital threat, to our security, our economy, and the health of our planet.
They talk about America “going alone” because we have abandoned the fight against global warming, abandoned the fight for a post-petroleum economy. But we are not going alone. We are going with Saudi Arabia, with Venezuela, with Nigeria, with Russia.
Those are our companions on the road we are traveling now.
It’s time to turn the car around. It’s time to turn this country around.
This is not just a matter of environmental protection, not just a matter of economic well-being: it’s a matter of national security. Since the terrorist attacks of September 11th, every national campaign has begun and ended with the question: will you keep America safe. Well it’s time to take a look at the hole we’ve been digging here, too.
If we do not address our dependence on fossil fuels, we cannot win the war on terrorism.
If we do not bring the war in Iraq to a speedy and satisfactory conclusion, we cannot win the war on terrorism.
If we do not rebuild our alliances, and restore our place as a global leader, we cannot win the war on terrorism.
What are the fruits of our current approach?
Iran has been enriched by the enormous rise in global oil prices. If it wishes to continue its pursuit of nuclear weapons, it is better able to afford it than ever before. And America’s diplomatic isolation makes it exceedingly difficult for us to apply effective pressure on the Iranian government to renounce any such ambitions in a verifiable manner.
North Korea has gone from being a near-nuclear state to a state our own intelligence agencies believes may have produced as many as half a dozen nuclear weapons. The failure of our strategy is so manifest that the South Korean government is now making direct overtures to China as the more reliable partner to address their volatile neighbor.
The Taliban has regrouped in Pakistan’s Northwest Frontier Province and, from their new base, has begun to expand both in Afghanistan and deeper into Pakistan, taking advantage of our underfunded and undermanned presence in the former and the weakness of the undemocratic government we relied on in the latter.
The war in Iraq has drained our treasury, weakened our alliances, and stretched our armed forces perilously thin, giving more opportunity to those who would take advantage of our distraction to do us harm.
We set out to isolate and defeat those who opposed us. Instead, we have isolated ourselves. And John McCain promises to isolate us further.
This campaign has been criticized for being “all words.” But you have to know, a President’s words have consequences.
When a President jokes about military action, it has consequences.
When a President threatens to expel a country from an international body that we do not control, it has consequences.
When a President implies an obligation of support for another country where none has been agreed, that has consequences.
And when a President implies a lack of regard for previously expressed commitments, that has consequences.
Not long ago, I went to Iraq to see for myself what kind of progress was being made on our efforts in that country. The mission, as I saw it, was to leave the country standing reasonably well on its own legs, and then leave it, to free our armed forces for vital missions elsewhere, and to fulfill our commitment to that country that we were there to protect its freedom, and not to determine its future.
Before leaving, I believed that a clear timetable for drawing down American forces would help build confidence in our mission in Iraq’s vital center, and make a safe and effective withdrawal more possible. My opponent took the opposite view.
And while I was there, the President of Iraq announced that he supported my approach.
Now, I don’t know about you, but it seems to me if we are in Iraq to enable the Iraqi government to stand on its own, and the Iraqi government tells us that they can stand on their own, that we ought to be able to take yes for an answer.
And, after a few weeks of grumbling, even the Bush Administration came around to my point of view. It’s taken John McCain a little bit longer.
I do not fault John McCain so much for his support for the Iraq War, because that support was widespread in Washington and he supported that war for noble reasons. You might have had to be outside of Washington to see how tragically mistaken the premises for that war were.
But it is past time – well past time – we reminded ourselves what our mission in Iraq is. We are not fighting in Iraq in order to stay. We are fighting in order to leave – and leave behind a stable, responsible and self-sufficient regime.
Let no one doubt that I take seriously the threats to American security that exist. But taking those threats seriously means prioritizing among them, weighing possible courses of action, taking advice from military and diplomatic officers, and making decisions based on sound judgment.
We are not doing what we need to do to prevent a resurgence of the Taliban in Central Asia. I will change that, and make winning our first war – the war against those who attacked us on September 11th – a renewed priority.
We are not doing what we need to do to prevent and roll back the spread of nuclear weapons. I will change that, and make control of nuclear material and technology – the only way to ensure against the ultimate nightmare of nuclear terrorism – a renewed priority.
We are not doing what we need to do to wean ourselves off imported oil. I will change that, and make energy independence a renewed priority.
We are not doing what we need to do to ensure our armed forces are properly equipped and trained, and that our military spending is properly aligned with the threats we currently face. I will change that, and make readiness a renewed priority.
My opponent, Senator John McCain, is an honorable man and a genuine American hero. We should all be glad to know that, in the worst case, America will still be led by a great patriot and a man of principle.
But a man of principle, a man of great personal courage, can still have principles that are wrong.
President Bush is not a bad man. I admire many things about him. His devotion to his wife and daughters. His sincere and humble faith. His comfort with people from all walks of life.
He’s not a bad man. He’s just a very bad President.
It’s time we made a different choice.
President. That is the office that Senator McCain and I are contending for. That is the choice the American people have to make.
You know, when this country was founded, it was not contemplated that candidates for the Presidency would campaign. And, in fact, there was no campaigning until the creation of the Democratic Party.
Thomas Jefferson, the founder of our party, understood something about governing a Republic that his opponents, the Federalists, missed.
If “we the people” are to be the source of authority, if the government is to serve us rather than we it, then we need to be engaged in the business of politics. We must be led by men – and women – of good character, but we can’t rely on their virtue to be enough to ensure our interests are taken care of. We need to be involved so that our interests are known, directly.
That’s why he founded America’s first mass political party. So that the government would serve the people, not just in an abstract sense, but in reality.
I’ve talked a lot in this campaign about the need for change, but I also used a phrase that has been much misinterpreted.
“We are the change we are waiting for.” That’s the phrase.
“We are the change we are waiting for.”
What does that mean?
It means that this campaign is not about one man’s ambition or one man’s dreams. This campaign, most fundamentally, is about democracy itself. And the awesome responsibility for preserving it rests not on the shoulders of one candidate or even one party, but on we the people.
If we are going to preserve this incredible achievement of American democracy, we have got to remain involved, as an active citizenry. We cannot – we must not – rely on one election or one man to make the difference. We have to do it, and keep doing it, day by day, year by year, generation following generation.
Forty-five years ago today, a great American leader, Dr. Martin Luther King, Jr., gave a historic speech. It was a speech about a dream, but not one man’s dream. It was a dream of a new nation, reconceived in liberty, and truly dedicated to the proposition that all men are created equal.
That dream was not all America’s dream forty-five years ago. But with every year and every generation, it became more and more of America’s dream.
The arc of history is long. But it bends towards justice.
And this campaign, by bringing millions of Americans into greater involvement with the needs of their communities and their nation, will play a small part in bringing that dream closer to reality.
On November 4th, we end the Bush/McCain chapter in our nation’s history. We stop digging this hole and start building up our country again.
But this campaign does not end on November 4th. It goes on, to preserve our democracy, and ensure that government of the people, by the people, and for the people does not perish from this earth.
We are the change we’ve been waiting for. Let’s stop waiting.
God bless you, and God bless the United States of America.
Quick, totally unrelated note: I don’t think Carter was a wine-track Democrat. Let’s remember a huge part of his appeal in ’76 was his Southern Baptist religiosity and folksy charm with more than a pinch of populism thrown in.
He reinvented himself as a wine-track Democrat later, especially after his presidency with his international work and antisem- uh, criticism of Israel because as a former President the only people who care about you are the intelligentsia, but I don’t think he was /elected/ as a wine-track Democrat. He was also a reform candidate but running against Ford and Nixon’s shadow and with his record as governor that was a no-brainer.
In my view, in many ways Carter as a candidate was a /sui generis/ figure who prefigured both Bill Clinton’s Southern charm-cum-centrist reformism and the evangelical-inspired rhetoric of later Republican candidates and, more broadly, the (re-)infusion of religion (for the better, in my view) in U.S. politics. Carter as a president was an abysmal failure, largely because of factors beyond his control (macroeconomic conditions, the Iran hostage crisis) and also because, frankly, the suit was too big for him and as a post-president he is a slightly creepy crank but he was much more than a traditional wine-track or beer-track Democratic candidate.
As I said, completely unrelated, but I think it’s a point worth making because Carter is a widely under or overrated figure whom I think was very interesting at that point in time and helps elucidate many of the features of U.S. politics in the three decades since his election.
Now I’ll shut up and read your speech…
— PEG · Aug 28, 08:54 AM · #
Ok, I read the speech, and I agree with you. I think it’s an excellent speech, and any Democratic candidate could do much worse than to deliver this as an acceptance speech, but I don’t think it’s an Obama speech.
I don’t think it carries his voice — there’s something different with the vocabulary and the rythm. And I also don’t think he would highlight the same themes as you. I think he would highlight more the bottom-up nature of his candidacy and the movement he has undeniably built. I think, paradoxically, he would spend more time on his religion and, less paradoxically, more time tarring McCain as four more years of Bush. Of course I’m probably wrong, we’ll see.
In any case I think it’s a great Democratic speech (I love the Reagan anecdote) but I don’t think it’s an Obama speech.
— PEG · Aug 28, 09:26 AM · #
Re: Carter: yeah, I was thinking of him more as a reform candidate than as a wine-track candidate, and I take your point. But neither Dukakis was nor Obama is exactly a wine-track candidate either – Dukakis because the shape of the field after Super Tuesday left three candidates (Gore, Jackson, Dukakis) none of home was a traditional beer-track candidate, and Obama because wine-track candidates like Hart don’t generally win the bulk of the black vote. So maybe the problem is my terminology and not the comparison with Obama?
Re: Obama’s voice: yeah, I was having a devilishly hard time both doing his voice and doing what I thought he needed to do. I’m very curious to see how he does it.
Re: religion: I was torn on this one. Here’s a passage I snipped out of an earlier draft:
I had two problems with this. First, we can’t mention Obama’s pastor. Second, I think Obama has got to get off biography and making himself a symbol of something and focus on connecting his biography to what matters to voters. Unfortunately, I couldn’t do the latter, so I just dropped biography and had the speaker take himself down a peg and focus on the people and the program, but that left very little room for religion.
So I agree that Obama is going to use more religious language, and I’m eager to hear how he does it. If he does it by talking extensively about his biography and how he’s a symbol of something, I think that will be a mistake and a failure. If he just sprinkles it naturally in and connects it to the concrete themes of the night, that’s a success.
Re: bottom-up candidacy: I agree, but I think it would be a mistake to center the speech on that. That’s where I ended the speech: by talking about why the Obama movement matters beyond that it will elect (he hopes) Barack Obama. But, again in an earlier draft, this theme was the core of the speech. The problem is that this message speaks to his most committed supporters, but not to anybody else. After all, the grassroots Obama movement did not connect with Democratic voters as a whole – it connected with half of them. Harping on how he’s the candidate with grassroots support sounds like a slap at Hillary – and he does not need to slap Hillary – and doesn’t draw an especially useful contrast with McCain unless he can connect that to differences in their programs. He can do that to some extent – McCain is surrounded by lobbyists and dependent on the RNC for support, for example, because he doesn’t have a grass-roots base of his own – but we’re now two steps removed from policy substance (dynamics of the campaign—>how money is raised—>policy outcomes) and we’re beating our heads against McCain’s image as independent maverick who hates special interests. It just didn’t seem like a good way to go.
Re: making McCain into Bush III: I thought I did quite a bit of that, actually. I did cut some of the hardest-hitting lines, though. In an earlier draft, I had a series of riffs on McCain’s “cause greater than self” trope. I paid homage to McCain’s suffering for such a cause as a POW, but then talked about other kinds of suffering. The victims of Katrina: what is the cause greater than self for which they suffer? The people who lose their homes or their savings because of fraudulent mortgage lending practices: what is the cause greater than self for which they suffer? And what is the cause greater than self for which McCain abandoned his prior support of legislation to prevent global warming? Anyhow, I cut that bit because I thought it was too harsh for Obama – better for one of the other speakers, best for somebody like Biden or one of the Clintons. It’s a fine line – you want the nominee to draw a sharp contrast, but not be harshly negative.
Myself, I don’t love the speech. What’s the big theme? I don’t know what it is. What will people remember from this? I don’t even remember it myself. It hits the points I think Obama needs to hit but it doesn’t do it in a way that pulls the candidacy together the way I think Obama needs to do. So in that way it’s a failure.
But thanks for the kind words.
— Noah Millman · Aug 28, 11:45 AM · #
Good effort — but is this going to be a yearly (or four-yearly or whatever) ritual? I mean I like it — pretty soon we’ll have commons-based speech-making, no? And political leaders will stroll the web, looking for speeches people think they should be making and incorporate bits and pieces of them. And maybe, budding speech writers could even make money off their efforts!
— scritic · Aug 28, 12:38 PM · #
I agree with PEG on “Carter as wine track Democrat is a little loopy” — I mean, seriously, you’re just too young to remember the dude’s family — while disagreeing with her that this would be a good speech for a Democrat.
You assert — I think with some accuracy, that Barack Obama isn’t really running on anything. I’d put a caveat on that — there’s a certain kind of delayed millenial, “OK, time to usher in a bunch of liberalism goals” idea which has new ideas for healthcare and maybe infrastructure sort of vaguely associated with his campaign (and I say vaguely because, I get the feeling he’s pertfectly willing to adopt any one of a dozen rather different means to try to achieve some of those goals, so long as he takes a swipe at them). But, frankly, that’s all he needs, and it would be folly to go much farther. There’s a CW that you can’t just run against stuff. But I think it’s wrong here. There’s so much revulsion at ways Bush has led — in my opinion taking real fundamental swipes at separation of powers and the American character — that Obama has to run, really, as somebody who’ll turn the page. Indeed I’m shocked that McCain has not done the same. If he were to do so, then, sure — Obama’s going to need to
find some overarching cause. But until then, “Stop! Enough!” is actually kind of a resonant message. Works for me.
— Sanjay · Aug 28, 12:54 PM · #
Sanjay-
Dude! PEG’s a dude!
— Matt Frost · Aug 28, 01:41 PM · #
Obama’s underlying, animating cause has never been a mystery to me and is easy to state: To actualize the (hypothetically) latent progressive governing majority in the country. The policy upshots are familiar: universal healthcare, progressive economic policy (work over wealth, labor rights, minimum wage, EITC, etc etc), internationalist foreign policy. The method: call out the culture wars and identity politics (left and right) as bullshit, and pretend everyone already agrees with you on the important stuff.
I’ve always thought the Reagan analogy was good.
— matt · Aug 28, 02:12 PM · #
Re: religion. I both agree and disagree with you.
I don’t think he needs to talk less about his biography. Us in the commentariat have had it up to our ears with his life story, but I’m pretty Joe Sixpack doesn’t really know anything about it, but he does know that John McCain is a war hero and a maverick legislator. Obama needs to be less solipsistic, he needs to sound less like he believes that simply by virtue of his background he is divinely ordained to become Potus, but that doesn’t mean he needs to stop peddling his life story, which he has to sell to voters. It’s a difficult balance to be sure, but I think he has the skills to pull it off.
I also think that he could use religion productively by tying each of the specific issues he wants to “change” to religious motives. Some lend themselves very well to that — healthcare, global warming, the mortgage crisis (houses built on sand…Wall Street unscrupulously peddling bad mortgages created an economy built on sand, I want to help YOU create an economy built on the rock of American values, values of liberty and fairness, not the selfish, opportunistic crush-your-neighbor false liberty of Wall Street but the liberty of entrepreneurs and middle class folks who realize you can’t have true freedom without a truly level playing field) — some not so well (Iraq?), but I think it can be done, and it would do much to anchor his candidacy on issues, instead of just hot air and biography.
Re: bottom-up candidacy. I think Obama needs to or will continue to highlight that because I truly think he actually believes in that stuff. Maybe I’m projecting onto him, because I’m a big believer in direct democracy and the potential of things like the internet to truly change democracy and governance, but I think down to his community organizing roots he believes in creating a movement that will not just propel him to the White House but also have a meaningful impact on policymaking.
The movement he has created truly is historic. Some people, including the Clintons and many working class folks see it as a pipe dream but I think it’s all the more evidence that he needs to expand the movement, and sell it more, so that it doesn’t become a sort of MoveOn 2.0 and becomes as broad-based as possible.
More broadly I agree with your general point that it’s so hard to write such a speech precisely because he hasn’t yet defined what his candidacy is truly about. The speech will be a golden opportunity for him to do that and he should do so but, of course, since we’re not in his head, we don’t know what the magic formula will be.
In any case I thought this was a great and very interesting exercise of yours.
— PEG · Aug 28, 02:30 PM · #
Oh, sorry. Because even though PEG’s a dude, “Peg” would not be, so, I go astray. But, do you know PEG’s a dude?
— Sanjay · Aug 28, 02:31 PM · #
Noah, great post. Some thoughts responsive, tangential, even irrelevant:
I am humbled and sobered. . . I don’t think I’d use the word “sobered,” especially given this story.
A prediction: this video, where Obama says “We have a stake in each other. . . I am my brother’s keeper”, is going to be used to devastating effect with this story. The more Obama congratulates himself on his life story, the more his personhood is leaned on as a justification for his candidacy, the more he advocates redistributionist policies to unite our “two Americas” at the ground floor, the worse the blow will be when the story of his “less than $1 a month” brother is finally and properly exploited by his Republican adversaries. Just sayin’.
We’ve got a lot of work to do, as a campaign, as a party, as a country, to get out of the hole that George Bush and John McCain have dug these past eight years. This attempt to tie Bush and McCain together is too clumsy. Plus, do you mean to suggest that the Obama campaign is in a hole? The Democratic party? Because of Bush and McCain?
Stepping back a bit, I think your use of colloquialisms would work on any other stage; unfortunately, Obama will be speaking at millions of people from a Greek temple.
…showing America that there really are no red states and blue states, but one United States, colored red, white and blue. This automatically made me think of unmentioned “white states”. I think I’d say something like “… but one United States, with colors and people as diverse as humanity itself, bonded together by the sacred promise of the red, white and blue.” (Yes, I’m an insufferable pedant, but half of speech writing is controlling subtext, subliminals and dog-whistles).
. . . every four years the Democratic and Republican candidates stand up and tell you this is a crucial election. Cynicism about politics is useful when used as contrast — that was the old way, this is the new way — but it’s kind of self-defeating when it’s followed by the claim we were just told to suspect.
We’re talking about America here. Obama would say “This is America”, full stop. The former is something Paulie Walnuts would say.
If I were Obama I’d be wary about calling Iraq a “bungled war.” A “misguided war”, sure; an “ill-conceived war”, fine.
I’d also not say “I’m a Christian.” That’s too exclusive. “I’m a believer” is much better.
Re: Reagan’s joke: Obama would say the punch-line, pause until the laughter died down, and then immediately transition into the “serious point” he wanted to make. Asking “It’s a good joke, isn’t it?” is, perhaps, something he would do on the campaign trail, but it’s definitely not something he would do in a capital-m Major speech. And he wouldn’t ask whether we feel like the boy on the pile. He would assert that, “after 8 years,” we are that boy on the pile.
I have to pause here to give you kudos for finding a simple yet salient metaphor for the entire ’08 election: keep digging through Republican shit, hoping to find the pony, or . . . ride the ass to tomorrow’s sweeter pastures. Seriously, this is brilliant imagery, and quintessentially American to boot. I nominate this as the most effective reduction of the choice Americans face that we’ve seen so far this cycle. Bravo, Noah.
The rest is good, but disjointed, and not very inspiring. Whether it’s me, you, Obama, the Democratic platform, or our political circumstances in general, I can’t say.
— JA · Aug 28, 03:54 PM · #
Oh, a suggestion. What do you guys think about Obama making his central themes Humility and Faith, to former to temper Change, the latter to harden hope.
I think this would undercut the Messiah-arrogance attack, and would open for Obama a true cause for his candidacy — i.e., a procedural reformation of the federal Government, informed by the two principles Humility and Faith.
— JA · Aug 28, 04:24 PM · #
Yeah, PEG is not a first name, it’s my initials, which is what the capitals are meant to suggest. But I understand the confusion, that’s okay.
And yes, I am a dude.
— PEG · Aug 28, 05:56 PM · #
I thought that was a great speech. The only thing I would have done different would be to be even more explicit on (what I see as) McCain’s absurd stands.
About Obama’s theme: it change. A change from the crappy goverance we’ve had. A change from the damaging divisive politics (not so easy it seems). A change to rational competent leadership. It’s the forest iding in the trees, and considering the current circumstances, exactly the right message, in fact, the only message that makes sense today.
— cw · Aug 28, 08:35 PM · #
Dear Noah:
You got the sentence length and word length just right. Microsoft Word puts the Flesch-Kincade grade level for your speech at 8.3, while Obama’s 2004 keynote address was a similar 8.0. In contrast, his March 2008 speech on race came in at 10.5.
— Steve Sailer · Aug 29, 02:21 AM · #
8.3 is actually pretty high. Most people writing text directed at the general public aim for somewhere between 4th and 6th grade. That is not really an insult. All it means is that you write simply. Short sentences with simple punctuation instead of a whole bunch of connected clauses. I guess vocabulary might come into it too. I can’t remember how FK works exactly. But english is rich in synonyms. There’s actually very little that you can say with verbal complexity that you can’t say simply. For instance, I’m sure someone could simplify my last crappy sentence.
— cw · Aug 29, 05:28 AM · #